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Little one playing, on the shallow stream
Just having fun, Just being a kid
Fun is more dangerous, than it might seem
Mother is watching, as it happens quick
Little one slips, the water turns red
She finally has reason, to slit her wrist
From a mother's love, they're together again
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:icongoldraid:

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I'm still exploring what pushes people over the edge...
However, I strongly am against suicide!
It leaves everyone else around you who care about you in deep sorrow...
NOT COOL!

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:iconmorologus-es:
Can't get no Satisfaction? Spare a thought for this guy, who's been singing of his problems for OVER FORTY years: [link]

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Update: March 22, 2009: You can send your contact details to !Morologus-Es if you wish.
:icongoldraid:
I have dial up...
I'll wait until school to see it...

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“To read a newspaper is to refrain from reading something worth while. The first discipline of education must therefore be to refuse resolutely to feed the mind with canned chatter.” - Aleister Crowley
:iconbrandon2cool:
Damn dude that was great. You left actually fucking speechless.....

You know the way you approached writing this and the way you went about was great. It was like watching the Saw Trilogy and the suprises at the end, AWE THE FUCK SOME (awesome) ;)
:icongoldraid:
I actually did this for an English assignment :)
They are exploring using one mood...
But I used two... starting off happy but ending in sadness

No quite sure if it is appropriate for school
I asked a few other teachers and they say it is border-line
They can't even attack my mind either because I'm not depressed :D
I'll just point out Edgar Allen Poe's work:P
lmao

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“To read a newspaper is to refrain from reading something worth while. The first discipline of education must therefore be to refuse resolutely to feed the mind with canned chatter.” - Aleister Crowley
:iconmorologus-es:
:boogie:

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Update: March 22, 2009: You can send your contact details to !Morologus-Es if you wish.
:iconakkarin-black-mage:
Wow...you're a good poet...geeze! :shocked: :omg: you're :#1:

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Dove sono i bei momenti, di dolcezza e di piacer? (Where have they gone, those sweet moments of pleasure?)
:iconskyquill:
I like how blunt this is. Even for it's length, it manages to take the emotion in it and just slam the reader with it. The descriptions are so good for grabbing the readers attention right away and leave it with an emotional ending. Good job!
:icongoldraid:
thankies :)
Despite my attempts in not making it too graphic...
The school wanted to see a psychologist after I handed this is :|

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“To read a newspaper is to refrain from reading something worth while. The first discipline of education must therefore be to refuse resolutely to feed the mind with canned chatter.” - Aleister Crowley
:icongoldraid:
wanted me to see a psychologist*

lol

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“To read a newspaper is to refrain from reading something worth while. The first discipline of education must therefore be to refuse resolutely to feed the mind with canned chatter.” - Aleister Crowley

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